Grammar and Spelling Mistakes - Part I

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Re: Grammar and Spelling Mistakes - Part I

Post by Prismatic Maelstrom » March 31st, 2014, 2:22 pm

I have finished and e-mailed Basilisk Games with the updated text files.

The following is a list of mistakes or suggestions that cannot be changed without access to map files, graphics or hard-coded text.

Map Files

Location: Express Route to Moonrise north of Rockhammer
Text: You see a old sign, obscured by weeds and...
Correction/Suggestion: Replace with “an”

Location: Inside Arima's building when clicking on one of the metal bins
Text: Inside this bin are chucks of iron slag.
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “chunks”

Location: Inside Arima's building when clicking on one of the metal bins
Text: Inside this bin are metal fragements, mostly iron and copper
Correction/Suggestion: Fragments is spelt incorrectly

Location: Wells outside Seawarden's Guild
Text: ...wheel loops around a gear and decends into the...
Correction/Suggestion: Descends is spelt incorrectly

Location: Name of location
Text: A Wrecked Ship, Level 1
Correction/Suggestion: Remove extra space

Location: Second level of wrecked ship at chest with the widget inside
Text: The chest is empty except for an odd metallic object.
Correction/Suggestion: Bottle of Wine is always in chest so I would change text to something like, “The chest is empty except for a bottle of wine and an odd metallic object.”

Location: Seawarden's Guild door before the stairs
Text: You see a very heavy door of Burly Oak and steel bands.
Correction/Suggestion: Would remove capitals

Location: Old Moonrise sign near former slave building
Text: You see a old, faded sign.
Correction/Suggestion: Replace with “an”

Location: Moonrise graveyard tombstone near temple
Text: “Capt. Edward Mapleton, distiguished explorer – d. 611”
Correction/Suggestion: Distinguished is spelt incorrectly

Location: Container that holds the Crux of Terra in Akadai Underworld
Text: You see a polished great clam shell.
Correction/Suggestion: Would replace with “giant”

Location: Iron door in Lair of the Emayu Witch
Text: You see a heavy iron door with a keyhold wreathed in Gothic metalwork.
Correction/Suggestion: Doesn't need to begin with a capital

Location: Description text when clicking on pedestal at graveyard in Omentor Temple
Text: You see a beautiful, gleeming crystal set atop...
Correction/Suggestion: Gleaming is spelt incorrectly

Location: Description text apon picking up the 'crystal' in Omentor Temple
Text: A voice from behind calls out “Do not take our gem, thief!”
Correction/Suggestion: Would add a comma at end of word before quotation mark

Location: Name of location
Text: Dwarven Mine Level 2
Correction/Suggestion: Would put a comma after mine for consistency with the wrecked ship maps

Location: Narration text for Secret Area in Omentor Temple
Text: A magicaklly darkened path leads a few...
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “magickally”

Location: Plaque in Ranger Hostel at Western Astral Range
Text: You see “Welcome to the West Astral Ranger Hostel”
Correction/Suggestion: Missing description “a plaque affixed to the wall.” and current text should be in the Extra Text box

Location: Text description of book in southwest section of Alundar's Dungeon
Text: ...through the second Gate of Immortality is the the removal of all fear...
Correction/Suggestion: Remove word

Location: Text description of painting in southwest section of Alundar's Dungeon
Text: “Mettar slays the serpent of the Akrid Wastes.”
Correction/Suggestion: Known as Akrid Flats on the Eschalon map

Location: Text description of painting in northeast section of Alundar's Dungeon
Text: “Tyronis lifts a 750 pound rock off a child's leg”.
Correction/Suggestion: Move full stop before quotation mark

Location: Text description of each painting in Alundar's Dungeon
Text: The caption reads
Correction/Suggestion: Would add “:” to the end

- - - - - - - -

Rockhammer Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Seawarden's Guild Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geo marker...

Elderoak Forest Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geo marker...

Moonrise Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Old Moonrise Geomarker
You see a geomarker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Mirkland Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Ulgolek Geomarker
You see a geomarker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Macross Point Geomarker
You see a geomarker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Castle Ruins Geomarker
You see a geomarker.
You read the inscription on the base of the geomarker...

Western Astral Pass Geomarker
You see a geo marker.
The plaque states that this is the "Western Astral Pass" marker, but the text below has been chipped away and is now illegible. This likely occurred after Alundar took control of these mountains.

Alundar's Pass Geomarker
You see a geomarker.

Correction/Suggestion: Would make text consistent by having “geomarker” instead of “geo marker”. The geo marker for Aldunar's Pass is missing the “You read the inscription on the base...” text

Graphics

Location: Ending Cinematic
Text: "I have not the resources nor the motivation to fight for future of this world..."
Correction/Suggestion: Add "the" between the words

Location: Congratulations/Score Screen Watermark
Text: Basilis
Correction/Suggestion: The letter "k" is missing from the end

Location: Wylderan Map (and possibly other maps)
Text: Seawarder's Guild
Correction/Suggestion: Should be "Seawarden's" Guild

Location: Opening Cinematic
Text: DESIGN AND PROGRAMING
Correction/Suggestion: Should be "PROGRAMMING"

Location: Opening Cinematic
Text: LEAD TESTERS & ADDITION DESIGN
Correction/Suggestion: Should be "ADDITIONAL"

Location: Prologue Cinematic
Text: "Give the Crux stones to me" he demanded.
Correction/Suggestion: Malkur says "Give me the two Crux stones." in Book II. If you don't want to change this, add a full stop or comma at the end before the quotation mark.

Location: Macross Point Signpost
Text: monthy
Correction/Suggestion: Monthly is spelt incorrectly

Location: Special cinematic that plays at the end of Karamilkan's dialogue
Text: You are aware that can make a choice.
Correction/Suggestion: Add "you" between the words

Hard-Coded Text

Location: Basilisk Games End User License Agreement
Text: Eschalon: Book III (c) 2014 Basilisk Games Games.
Correction/Suggestion: Remove word

Location: Narration Window after getting a quest
Text: The quest "Name of Quest" has been added To your journal.
Correction/Suggestion: Would remove capital

Location: Window that appears when you want to delete a spell
Text: You can re-learn spell only by reading the appropriate scroll.
Correction/Suggestion: Add the word "this" between the words

Location: Trap Disarming Window
Text: Chance of successfull disarm:
Correction/Suggestion: Successful is spelt incorrectly

Location: Narration text after level-up
Text: [Character Name]'s maximum Hit Points have increased by [Number]. Maximum Mana Points have increased by [Number]
Correction/Suggestion: Missing full stop at the end

Location: Narration text when a Blue Nidaria attacks you
Text: Blue Nidaria assults [Character Name]...
Correction/Suggestion: Assaults is spelt incorrectly

Location: Atrox Deep Prisoner in Moonrise Underground
Text: Nature must take it's course, that's what master says!
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “its”

Location: Window when selecting how much gold to bet with Lucky
Text: How much Gold do you want to bet?
Correction/Suggestion: Gold doesn't need to begin with a capital

Location: Window when gambling with Lucky
Text: “Well, neither of us won the 'come out' roll, so Now you roll until you get your point, which is [number]. But If you roll a [number], Then the gold is mine!”
Correction/Suggestion: Unnecessary capitals

Location: Window when gambling with Lucky
Text: Go on, keep rolling until you one of us wins!
Correction/Suggestion: Remove “you”

Location: Window when gambling with Lucky
Text: Lucky promptly crawls out a window and hops on a dingy tied to the dock.
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “dinghy”

Location: Window when gambling with Lucky
Text: You rolled an 3.
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “a”

Location: Narration text when Akadai Kingspawn does special attack
Text: Akadai Kingspawn has issued a powerful and fearsom battlecry!
Correction/Suggestion: Fearsome is spelt incorrectly

Location: Narration text when you attack any enemy resistant to arrows
Text: Skeletal Archer is resistant to arrows weapons!
Correction/Suggestion: Should be “arrow”

Location: Name of Item
Text: Hellforged Mithril Conqueror's Sword
Correction/Suggestion: Remove extra space

Location: Narration text when failing Pacifist Challenge
Text: (You have killed more than 20 creatures)
Correction/Suggestion: Replace with “19”

Location: Destroying condensing vessel and returning to Ulgolek
Text: Upon emerging, you see that the Father Tree has suddenly sprouted leaves!
Correction/Suggestion: Would replace with “Grandfather Tree” as Ulgolek is usually referred to as such

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: A Regiment of Dwarves from the...
Correction/Suggestion: Would remove capital

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: Erubor has called on the Rangers of Elderoak to...
Correction/Suggestion: Would remove capital

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: ...murder of Phoenix backed by a herd Taurax Spearmasters!
Correction/Suggestion: Add “of” between the words

Location: Name of NPC
Text: Dark Steel Mercenaries
Correction/Suggestion: Mercenary?

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: With both sides depleated of forces...
Correction/Suggestion: Depleted is spelt incorrectly

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: Malkur's Dimensional has been slain!
Correction/Suggestion: Would add “Eye” between the words

Location: Text box during battle at Macross Point
Text: A division of Goblin Hackers and Archers are moving...
Correction/Suggestion: Goblin Soldiers?
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